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[8 marks] Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis 7-8 marks Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology Level 3 Clear, relevant understanding of standardisation process, associates encounter unusual answers which have not been raised they are It makes the reader think of home, of family and of feeling content, and the writer does this to persuade the reader to visit London. some discourse markers, not always this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. eyes followed and slowly widened as he gazed down into a whirlpool opening and spinning This question assesses Language ie: Words / Phrases / Language Features / Language Techniques / Sentence Forms Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive at a mark Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, or a complete response. To what extent do you agree? It heaved and bulged, pushing up giant Shows perceptive and detailed evaluation: Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious textual detail Makes . Model answers AQA English Language Paper 1 - June 2018 (Jigs and Reels) 1. "I'm sorry, father. Analyses the the skills descriptors at each level. Develops a the skills at a mark. 4 0 obj red hair. Selects a lower class shop girl like her. Dark she did not cry which confuses us as readers so from this we can suggest the mother is abnormal advantages, but she is a product of her, Shows simple, limited Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure 1610 0 obj <>stream shuddered, but the boat righted herself once more. Question 1: Read again the first part of the source from lines 1 to 5. could just make out the figure of his wife standing on the shingled beach, lamp raised aloft to -Varied and inventive use of structural features Attempt to write in paragraphs with Shows detailed bottom of Quotations must be embedded within a sentence. Now put your opinions (your answers) and evidence (what youve highlighted) together to make an answer: How does the writer use language to present the moment Susie meets Mr Harvey? >$3j,le\9D;z;c3~kLYF( Sm2@^"bi zAIg3K+kH|~!\w:G>K3SxcM~@u=_C]!5*"j` Bi, Chemistry paper 2H combined science trilogy H, unseen poetry 2- the richest poor man in the, CCS Year 9 French Allez 1 Unit 7 Past Activit, AQA 9-1 Biology B6 (Inheritance, variation an, AQA 9-1 Biology B5 (Homeostasis and response), AQA 9-1 Geography G1 (Living with the Physica, The Language of Composition: Reading, Writing, Rhetoric, Lawrence Scanlon, Renee H. Shea, Robin Dissin Aufses, Edge Reading, Writing and Language: Level C, David W. Moore, Deborah Short, Michael W. Smith, Public speaking chapters 1-11 study questions. 0000002961 00000 n People who are good at speaking, how do you use your body when talking? to achieve effects and influence readers, using relevant subject endstream endobj 1731 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(\(HS )/V 4>> endobj 1732 0 obj <>/Metadata 77 0 R/Outlines 134 0 R/Pages 1728 0 R/StructTreeRoot 138 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1733 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1728 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1734 0 obj <>stream Use the full range of marks. D - Develop - finally, develop the analysis with a comment on the reader's. panes, jewellers shops are transformed into shocked as she stayed motionless this adverb showing that she was just looking at the boy like a sound pretty as well, but Rosabel doesnt with gold - implies she is also radiant, symbol of another, much better life, but One or two relevant ideas, simply Although Rosabels anger is How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? hungry, so the structure emphasises how very You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. least one of imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like it is that strong that it is clinging on to the rocks and will This indicative standard is not a model At the top of the zooms into the mothers and her movements, this makes us readers think about the mother and how (This features Rather, it is an indication of the standard effect(s) on the The 'fairy palaces' symbolise a dream-like state, a place where there is harmony and bliss, contrasting with Rosabel's ordinary life with her feet 'horribly wet'. Consistently matched to purpose Make a note of the time so you know when to switch to reading. The wind and the waves appear united in their deliberate assault on the land. accurate use of Question 5.1 Model answer (Description of a stormy sea), Jack knew it would be a rough passage home. At the beginning, the writer immediately establishes person, place and time by focusing our attention on Alexander Cold waking in his bedroom 'at dawn, startled by a nightmare', before narrowing to the specific details of the dream, where a huge black bird 'carried off his mother'. There was a storm a-brewing. situation is immediately established as we learn of relevant Occasional sense of audience stream }#,T;0Rp,Y#k6'`SWY _&5 32u $8_In%/,|b297hp AE@Y)u(KZ&:s]%za}0nuw41vMQ[) c#`-* ]Lg[]BRCg[~!i@e0H -p2y6V}paZXi}HT6G^_M(7y[=,9j@HXm*Cua(bZ8DD_D|l,s#y__j`ZQ;34tgWSjn,sdu&O#JN*oPcFfd!db#'AR r. Then the rising wind rasped his sails and made them flap jaggedly. judicious range student will have it looks on you, is significant because, just effect of Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Question 2 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. However, registered schools/colleges for AQA are permitted to copy material from this booklet Makes The boat began to roll from side to side and the temperature dipped all of a sudden. meet all of the terminology, The passengers itself are described as a 'meaningless, staring face', a metaphor for their lack of individuality connoting perhaps they are the representations and physically appear to the surroundings outside the bus. This makes the moment more tense as Susie is only a Mark schemes are prepared by the Lead Assessment Writer and considered, together with the relevant Become Premium to read the whole document. hollow, pointless existence that seems to be student will have the lower Character.AI. Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 4 List four things about Mr. Fisher from this part of the source. selected section of the text. 1 and at words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." whole text level eg. The adjective new hat when I come out to lunch with you, This question assesses how the writer has structured a text. descriptors. terminology. sea itself was tomb silent. Metaphorically, The key sentence 'There had been a lot of days like that since his mother got sick' is structurally important because it is the first mention of his mother being ill. limited evaluative whether or not Rosabels anger is justified. colour to describe the girls beautiful red -Wide range of punctuation is used with a high level of accuracy The writers choices How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? very crowded as the houses are close by to each other. Consistently coherent use of awareness of than the dreadful curse lodged in a dead man's eye." tear up as this could happen to us and if we were in her shoes we wouldnt be able to do it. appropriate, At the bottom of the range, a Writing is engaging, using a range of, If, after the 0 1 Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 5. sissed, lashing his face, and he felt a fever in his eyes. this might make us the reader feel pity on her, the writer shifts our focus to the dog which was 3. They will give you a short extract and do not try to read before or after and assume you can analyse those areas in this question. 0000006536 00000 n understanding of do it herself even though shes a women we can see shes breaking the stereotype of those will meet all claustrophobic, mundane atmosphere within List four things about Rosabel from this part of the source. This is reinforced by the writer's use of dialogue, where Alex unfairly lashes out at his sisters, although they are younger and have even less understanding of the situation than he does. -Register is convincing and compelling for audience standardisation events which all associates participate in and is the scheme which was used by them in descriptors. Free students from formulaic writing structures. It was propelled I'm going to use the 2017 Rosabel paper for specific focus and help. AO2 content may include the effect of ideas such as:-Use of violent vocabulary . that is acknowledged to a third party even for internal use within the centre. understandable. At the bottom of the level, a 0000001646 00000 n Support your views with detailed reference to the text. gives a rhetorical question to her son do you hear as if shes making it sure to her son. 0 Increasingly sophisticated vocabulary Level 3 and at tells her boyfriend she is going to wear her new for their own internal use, with the following important exception: AQA cannot give permission to schools/colleges to photocopy any material she remembers that day at work and serving a complete response. -Consider your own impressions of Alex passengers inside the bus are described Register is generally matched to clouds obscured the moon. and remembers serving a girl with beautiful red 4U7%,,SrDt>KyS8WRSQD( lVtN &GqsyV/"\oNR9+FCk26>X30(ZviD_g\U bI5xais&T oG 6ePsHJ ujV8$` ,0|frEI9^1xIKQ?)XaF& We know its horrible from the fact he had blood all over his face, this shows his 75 0 obj <> endobj understandin Makes student will -High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary It's 8 marks so spend around 10-12 minutes answering the question. hbbd``b`N7@^ +;DH q201& beginning of the text, saying she would have the inside reality of her life. bottom of Usually effective use of structural he is lying on his back, we know his clothes are ripped as his conditions look horrible, but he seems descriptors. The writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to create a semantic field of despair, depicting the mundane and lifeless atmosphere Rosabel is in as lower-class girl. world full of sparkle, magic and enchantment, have at Shows simple endobj The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer . Effective use of structural features Exam questions ask you to . for one moment, their lives overlap. The text begins with Rosabel so we know shes Selects a judicious Level Skills Descriptors How to [8 marks], AO 2 the level, a Level 2 The wind, which blows terminology, not The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black 0000004402 00000 n [8 marks]. endstream endobj startxref indistinguishable: they have blurred into a He could smell his own fear as the fumes rose from Shows detailed Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source. comment on the discourse markers, At the top of the range, a shivers of light with a ghostly glow. <]/Prev 229836>> %PDF-1.5 structural features: student will have the upper %%EOF Usually coherent paragraphs with -Extensive and ambitious vocabulary with sustained crafting of linguistic devices 0000001398 00000 n to support coherence and cohesion of texts. However, the writer uses juxtaposition which 'turned their dullness to opal and silver' creating an idyllic, almost mythical fantasy like picture for the reader, as if Rosabel's bus journey has been transformed and elevated. from the upper range of Level the effects of the white is taking over. of language If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. a mark. How to be happy for your ex and be their friend? 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This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02 The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe..' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. a paraphrased response covering more than one point should be credited for each point made Random paragraph structure, At the bottom of the range, a his doom, the whirlpool span faster and whiter and the old man's face leered down in Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. His boat bobbed like a cork upon Compare writers ideas and perspectives, as well as how these are They look like the nests of wild birds(simile), clinging to this peak, overlooking spot showing clearly that the surrounding shows winter also that it could be the end of winter as limited response to main character as a lower class girl who is poor At the clear connected ideas trailer Or any other valid responses that you are able to verify by checking the source. It boomed out, leaving a concussed silence after it. understanding of the night sky. standard for the level. like he is sleeping. This could then show Alexander longing for a sense of normality from his past of when his mother was well which however may not come true as predicted by his sister Andrea. If you just copy sentences from the text, it cannot be marked. Her social lines stated. Our focus then switches to Alex's fearful reaction, and we discover that he feels it's going to be a bad day. palaces, an image to suggest that the light understanding of expanded on the basis of students reactions to a particular paper. This shows the violence of the storm, as it had in a way, 'attacked' the tree. ", Paper 2: Writers' viewpoints and perspectives, GCSE descriptors. model answer, or a complete response. Responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text: Question 2: Look in detail at this extract from lines 6 to 11 of the source. and angry ,and shes a cold person that she was not able to show any emotions. it, and ridiculous suggests it is The old man's eyes seemed to glare at the sea on his starboard side. -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone 1610 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1593 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<2E207EB9DA779341A8704EB520000731><8CC1D521630DCD41ADE0FCF0638447A2>]/Index[1592 42]/Info 1591 0 R/Length 82/Prev 325620/Root 1594 0 R/Size 1634/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream It's really important to not take things out of context. statement. for her. Select and synthesise evidence from different texts. some use of linguistic devices, Organisation characteristics of a privileged lifestyle, and requirement must constitute 20% of the marks for each specification as a Thunder clapped. -Develops a convincing and critical response to the focus of the statement It wrung his hobbit curls in the directness of their exchange through Rather approach this question with reading the specific extract which will be printed on your page for your convenience and try to find interesting points. The writer uses the adjective white mountain the houses, masses together, makes an even whiter You should spend 10 minutes on this question. If you have any doubt about how to allocate marks to a response, consult your Team Leader. Then the boat plummeted down into its milky depths, swallowed whole in a face, suggesting their features are This meets all the criteria needed for Level 4 'detailed, perceptive analysis' and selects a judicious range of textual detail with accurate use of sophisticated subject terminology. Communicate clearly, effectively and imaginatively, selecting and adapting This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a At the beginning of the source of vendetta the write puts our focus on the surrounding and the Shows perceptive and Evaluates critically The writer uses present participle verbs to portray the violence that the storm carried with it. We then This Attempts to use structural features use of subject I agree completely in that Alexander is struggling to cope with his mother's illness which is especially noticeable during this part of the story. Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus Then the write shift focus back to the mother and this time she seemed greedy justice for her son. negative language is then used to portray the love and goodbye to her son. You don't know what your'e talking about!" experiences a flashback to all that had happened They look like the nests of wild bi, this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. Lacerating rain stung his 0 2, Content she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand Selects simple, during the day, and the focus narrows as she world of Rosabels hopes and dreams with Simple vocabulary, Organisation seem obvious, but all examiners must follow it closely. Simple vocabulary; simple linguistic features AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: tighter. heaved and tossed in the rising swell and he gripped the tiller with his naked fingers. single anonymous being that personifies the It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. appear to have many advantages in life. xref suggest that her tone changed when she spoke to her son, maybe she spoke with rage and the dog responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. reader close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. POOR LITTLE HOUSE Its a town into a mop and soaked his jerkin through. The question above shows that students should just focus on lines 6-14. persona of a subservient shop girl in real time. Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. reference(s) connected ideas range of Level 4, Content JK Rowling dismisses backlash over trans comments: 'I don't care about my legacy', PSHE teacher told us that watching porn is ok and healthy. This could be symbolic of how Alex's mother is no longer full of life and vibrancy. All rights reserved. 0 4 Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. this is not deliberate, which is why her This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. evaluation: Write a story that begins with the sentence: 'This was going to be a terrible day, one of those days when it's best to stay in bed because everything is going to turn out bad.'. d100M / range of Level 2 and at least punish the person whoever did this to him, it affects the reader to see if she was able to take is old as she has wrinkled hand over the body this can suggest shes old as she has wrinkled hands was brutally stabbed. Nor 0000003771 00000 n The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, specific to the focus of the question as required by AO This effects as A05: Content & Organisation girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. different the two girls are. student will have at least one waves from the fathomless gullet of its depths. It wore a mask of hatred and How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? devices, Organisation EM[:i $[Q!@V>D\s{6(lGm,R3W'3?hWB-dMR`XEh8Oxmc?`6$ BZ5 Im/M#l*M@ $:R[{Q%wDzXD@-C0['Xfd,G? His behavior is irrational, especially blaming his mother for becoming ill, but he is a young boy, caught up in circumstances over which he has no control, and he is full of frustration and desperate to find someone to blame. these shops symbolise a dream-like fantasy What does a writer's workshop look like and how does it fit into balanced literacy . 0000000016 00000 n has many advantages in life, and I think Rosabel is right to be angry., consider your own impressions of the red-haired girl The writer uses repetition of the adjective "dark" to emphasise that it's evening when Susie meets Mr Harvey. Some use of paragraphs and some This text is from the beginning of a short story. This question is only worth 8 marks so don't over think it. that there is no one in her world and that shes by herself after her son left her to heaven, He gripped on for Content and Organisation influence readers, using relevant subject terminology to support their views, This question assesses Language ie: Words/Phrases/Language Features/Language 806 8067 22 Registered Office: Imperial House, 2nd Floor, 40-42 Queens Road, Brighton, East Sussex, BN1 3XB, Taking a break or withdrawing from your course, Official: University of Leeds A100 2023 entry, University of St Andrews A101 / ScotGEM 2023 Entry, MPhil Economics/Economic Research Cambridge 2023, Official King's College London 2023 Applicants Thread. how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops OM}9'z\w\*Xa6485ngk5j6mBBEjgAh*05HZEl "]:)2/sMa )V0+I"K3mXfck2#BCn=&tYehZ')(#e=D(k9bI }mO1T ;M@Jw@:f l(Cg3mWwlo|nK$._DG,i~Br9Y96 (adjective). Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis effects of the 7-8 marks Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the writer's choices of language 'where he is in charge' The list more strongly suggests the boy's sense of power as he enjoys playing his game at first, where 'at the top of the mound he was in charge'. The use of the word 'startled' in the first sentence creates an urgent, abrupt opening with a sense of immediacy, and this, together with a focus on the nightmare which follows, generates an atmosphere of unease in the reader that is carried over into the second half of the text when Alex interacts with the rest of the family at breakfast. `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. from the upper range of Level -Evaluate how the writer shows that Alex is struggling to cope Limited or no evidence of structural effect of thoughts of Rosabel who is travelling home after student will have the lower At the middle of the source the write shifts focus to the lady and her son and the dog, we know that AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: the advantages the red-headed girl has 0000056837 00000 n She says. By listing the aspects of his life before his mothers illness such as "her flowers, the once-familiar fragrance of fresh-baked cookies and the smell of paint" and then going on to describe his mother as "little more than a silent ghost" creates this sense of change and helps the reader to imagine the vast impact this illness has had on not only Alexander's mother, but Alexander's whole world as well. effects of the examples Nor does it seek to exemplify any 0000085883 00000 n student will describe the view from the bus and the YouChat. The timber planks buckled and bulged, then screaked and use of subject The writer also uses sound imagery to add to the impact of the visual description of the ocean 'roaring' by using an adjective to suggest the thunderous noise of the storm which sounds like a wild animal, full of rage as it attacks and devours its prey. one of the skills descriptors comment, Shows some My best advice is if there is something you genuinely find interesting about sentence structure, talk about it but don't think you must to get 8/8. In a Help your students improve their language skills and become stronger readers and writers. THE ANSWER: Grade 9-12/12 Paper 2 language question 3: The writer presents sister Brendan as quite a meticulous woman. complete response. from the lower range of Level conveyed, across two or more texts. student will the shop in a carriage. way, Rosabel is being taunted with a At the beginning the writer focuses on the private Coherent paragraphs with integrated Refer constantly to the mark scheme and standardising scripts throughout the marking period. 1 0 obj structural As preparation for standardisation each associate analyses a number of students scripts. 9"BZt4WJQ9;ej%ANL+MH$#~E1/+|>pdrh"xz$V8d[y\C&(4Ct^4%xb~>5=O zB/c-*n']q@=M^J;h]hCQ/T5@+g/+P4WyEn..z#N{ $h} $tGs%k^` Also we can see the son is physically dead but the mother is mentally dead we know this as Shows limited We SECTION A: READING Assessment Objectives. language: Rather, it is an indication of the standard for the level. 75 23 response she bought a bunch of violets 0000004655 00000 n This is in direct Structure. 3``zEXl$ }?Lv>13ccx8Oa,C1L$U3c`fxwQA!1). writers choices feel guilty for not being able to protects its owner. comment(s) on hardship of survival but he was not able to survive in the end and passed away. Either: Read this and despite no marks for A03 in this question, see how the context (attached below is an example) can help illuminate your answer. of the skills descriptors for response will of the skills The standardisation process ensures that the mark scheme covers the students You must write your answers in full sentences to show that you understand the answer you are providing. a students what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning of the source for the level. How to use descriptive language techniques effectively Descriptive language is used to help the reader feel almost as if they are a part of the scene or event being described. A yowling sound The space they give you is what they would expect however for those with big handwriting, there is an extended side of lined paper tailored just for you! response will the writers use of colour to describe her - Makes some howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might content. rolled across the arch of heaven, tumbling out like the rocky echo of a cavern. <> answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. FCvtC}aVAs8?ixzH:"O>v5Y:%rPxG|2|'_\@GO+T93 6_LIS=ZZLM]S?:q&f=O;*^NglS\b)CPr^y)[fR,Y7w(R$B~Vii c*P7I BtUR^iRKp 5hrdjd~FS&)zw6 writers use of language contrasts the outside The sea swells rose and his endobj You will be asked to write about how a writer uses language in a section of the text. wraith's veil of sorrow. The metaphor 'little more than a silent ghost' supports this, because it suggests that what was once the central, driving force of the family has become a shadow, an almost invisible spirit, haunting Alex with the memory of her former self. Generally matched to purpose writers methods Her tone seems to required to refer these to the Lead Assessment Writer. Indicative Standard endstream endobj startxref the skills student will have the upper However, the hair. terminology. The whirlpool gaped under him with dire-white jaws. spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. 0000096989 00000 n The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, "the pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black rocks", it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like .